Charlie II

Hello LindsayG! I must say, I like poems/stories that focus on a writer's perspective on life! :wink: Perhaps it's because we get told to "write what we know!" and that ...

Hey SubjectBlue, let's see what you've got here! General impression I think this poem is about the "cage" of other peoples' expectations. You've chosen a King, whose job (in a ...

Hey Adara -- well it's review day! Just one thing before I begin: you've used at least one swear-word in this piece, which isn't a problem if you "rate" the ...

I can't put my finger on it, but there's something irresistible about this novel. Please keep writing! :wink: I'm going to do things slightly differently this evening. 1. The Good ...

Hello again! I'm afraid to say it's not the greatest conclusion to your first chapter. There were gems here too, but I don't think the second part lives up to ...

Please, take this review with a pinch of salt -- I know exactly how subjective humour is, but naturally this review is going to include that. So, [in my opinion] ...

I love the fact that, when reading this, I can't make any of my usual comments. It's nice to see a writer who has both control over her narrative and ...

An intriguing short story. I understand from your "spoiler" that you had some trouble with the formatting -- it looks pretty good to me actually, though you could probably do ...

Interesting choice of a character -- a criminal who's escaping from prison. I can tell there's a lot of potential here, so let's see if we can improve this. I'm ...

My god that was creepy! :P 1. Tone/voice Natural speech is interesting. It's also very difficult to write effectively, and I think you did a very good job, but there ...

You've got a good start to a chapter with a lot of potential. Let's see if we can find a few ways to grow this. 1. Description Personally I don't ...

It has been a long while since I read something that moved me quite as deeply as this story did. Your style is fantastic, I honestly can't fault it. Perhaps ...

What a fascinating piece. I don't know what "flash-fiction" is meant to be, but I thought the idea behind this snapshot was excellent. It's fantastically original. Because it's such a ...

An interesting question, and an equally interesting essay. You clearly know your facts and terminology, your argument flows logically, and your essay form is good as well. I do have ...

Ah. Very nice. ;) The twist was, of course, unexpected, but I felt it came a little too early to have maximum impact. I see that this is a contest ...